As an abstract this works.... I too suffer from the focal point challenge.
What I do get drawn too is the bright area top left, then down to the bottom right and finally back to the in focus drops, and scratches.
I have similar problems to Tom in finding a focal point. I think it is because my eyes are trying to get drawn to the OOF foreground more than the focused area in the top left. It could be because the pattern is more dense at the bottom and therefore attracts my eye. Love the conecpt though.